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Monday, December 21, 2009

A great day for kissing



Are you under the mistletoe? Today is Kissing Day Blogfest, and almost sixty people signed up to write a scene for your swooning pleasure. Gustav Klimt's famous The Kiss seems a perfect accompaniment for my little scene from a YA paranormal/fantasy, a work-in-progress called Sea Daughters.
"What's wrong? You're a million miles away." Ben slipped his arm around Hallie as they sat on his living room sofa. He was so close she could smell the freshness of his just-laundered shirt.
Hallie's heart fluttered, just like the rapid beat of a tiny bird she'd held as a child. Ben's parents were away and she knew he wanted to make love to her, at least as much as she'd allow.
The trouble was she didn't know what she might allow. She'd become confused about life, how tenuous it is, how it could change like quicksilver before you knew what happened. She wanted to be saturated with Ben's kisses in case she was about to lose him.
If he found out who she really was he would flee, she was sure.
He reached in his pocket and pulled out a shell bracelet. "I got this for you. Kinda simple, but it goes with your necklace." His hand shook a bit as he held it out to her.
"It's beautiful." She fumbled with the clasp, her eyes tearing. The bracelet slipped from her wrist.
Ben grabbed it before it hit the floor, and his large hands became steady as he deftly hooked the tiny clasp. "I like having something from me wrapped around you, even when I'm not there."
He kissed her palm. The brush of his breath caused a warm rush to surge through her.
He looked up, his eyes meeting hers, and she wanted nothing more than to dive into those blue depths and not think about the other deep that pulled stronger every day.
"Sometimes life is more complicated than we ever imagine it could be," she said.
"What has got you twisted in knots? I will help you untangle it. I will slay dragons, help you write essays, punch out anyone who hassles you, cover you with kisses. Whatever you need, baby."
She smiled. "My hero."
"I wish I was. But sometimes I think you will leave me behind. It's a feeling I get."
For a moment Hallie couldn't speak. "I don't want to go places without you. Ever. But I get caught up in stuff and can't always talk to you about what's going on. I want to be able to tell you everything."
His arms wrapped around her and anchored her in a safe harbor. This time, she could feel his heart--a steady drum.
"Don't leave me," she whispered. "No matter what."
His face was in her hair, his breath hot. "Nothing could ever make me leave you."
Not even my darkest secret? She banished the thought. Her mouth found his--lips parted, hint of peppermint.
His hands tangled in her hair. Hers slid around his waist. His kisses trailed down her neck to her collarbone like liquid fire. She flamed and melted. She was wax on a candle. There was nothing but Ben.

47 comments:

  1. Lovely Tricia! I want to know what her secret is!

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  2. I love the imagery at the end here--the flame and melt, wax on the candle. Very nice! I really want to know what her secret is, too!

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  3. the last paragraph is fantastic. just wonderful metaphors. great job!

    jeannie
    Where Romance Meets Therapy

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  4. Oh, I loved this! I'm so intrigued. I want to know what she's keeping from him and how he'll feel about her after he learns about it. Plus, the kiss was great; loved the metaphor to wax on a candle.

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  5. Mmmm, delicious! Passion and mystery all tangled together. :)

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  6. Passion perfectly expressed: "something from me wrapped around you" and "she flamed and melted."

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  7. I didn't know about Kissing Day, but I'm glad you posted this. After hearing you talk about this book, I was very curious to read more of it. Great scene!

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  8. Good work, Tricia! Lovely, just lovely.

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  9. Thanks, everyone! I'm loving the comments. This is such a fun fest.

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  10. This scene weaves so much into it! In just a few paragraphs, I know so much about your characters...and I already feel for them....and I want them to end up together!

    And, there is still that lyrical quality that infuses all of your writing.

    Well done and thanks for sharing it!

    Shelley

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  11. "Secret" is the magic word to get me hooked on just about anything. Curiosity is great!

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  12. Now I'm dying to know what the secret is?!! I loved the passion they exuded for one another.

    Great reading!

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  13. Love it! I want to know what her dark secret is. I love how he is willing to do anything for her- even slay dragons!

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  14. Beautiful metaphors! I'm dying to know her dark secret? I wonder... I want more!

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  15. Dark secrets always get in the way, don't they?

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  16. Thanks, everyone! I'm so glad the dark secret is tugging at people and the passion comes through.
    And, Shelley, wow, thanks for such a comment.

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  17. Fantastic!! And I just loved it when he said:
    "I like having something from me wrapped around you, even when I'm not there."
    **sigh**

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  18. Oooooooo!!! Like wax on a candle...what pretty words you weave! I love it! And I, too, want to know the dark secret! Great job!!!! Thanks sooo much for participating and making the day so fun!

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  19. I'll echo everybody's sentiments - I really want to know the secret. This is great!

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  20. Superb, Tricia! Now, about that dark secret...

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  21. Swoon!

    I love Gustav Klimt and The Kiss is my second favorite painting of his. My fave is This Kiss For All the World. There's something about angels singing in the background of that kiss that just strikes me as poetic.

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  22. I was sooo hoping you'd post a scene from your WIP. LOVED it! I know the secret!!!! :) Waterlogged minds think alike. Great job. Cant wait to read the whole thing.
    Karen’s Blog

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  23. Makes me want to know what the secret is...

    Good job!

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  24. I'm with everybody! I want to know this secret. Hm . . . .

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  25. Love the imagery as she melts in passion. Very nice.

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  26. I like your style. It's both lyrical and romantic. The stark sweetness of them together charmed me complete. Thanks for sharing your talent with me.
    Warm regards,
    Simone.

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  27. You guys are the greatest! I'm loving these comments. WELCOME to all and thank you so much.

    Jennifer, that's my favorite line, too.
    Stephanie: I went to see the Klimts in Vienna. *sigh*
    Karen: I hope you are still as excited as I am about your project, and thanks!

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  28. I have to tell you with the most sincerity possible, you are a terrific writer! This is my kind of novel. LOVED it!

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  29. Excellent imagery. I love the part about his arms 'anchoring her in a safe harbor'. What a great way to think of it!

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  30. I LOVED the end. That was really beautiful.

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  31. Love those last few sentences. Wax on candle. Nothing but Ben. Beautifully written Tricia.

    Have a wonderful Christmas.

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  32. "...liquid fire..." Oh, yes. I know what you mean. Wow, loved the extended metaphor. Nicely done.

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  33. oooh! I LOVED this! So awesome... and of course, it makes you wonder what her secret is...

    Jenni James

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  34. T. Anne: I'm humbled. Wow, thank you.

    EVERYONE: I am in heaven that so many of you picked out my favorite lines and mentioned them. Thank you, thank you, thank you!

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  35. I'm curious about the secret too. Love the use of all the senses, made me feel like I was there, watching them in real life. Gosh, I'm such a voyeur!

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  36. Nicely done! What is her big secret? I'd love to read more!

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  37. Bish, Linda & LiLa: Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I'm working furiously on this one. Bringing a chapter to crit group tonight.

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  38. Really really nice! What's the big secret, I wonder!

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  39. Wow...so fascinating! I wonder what the secret is? I can't wait to find out!

    You can read mine right here! Let me know what you think!
    :)

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  40. The last line was just, wow, awesome. And I'm itching to know what her secret is. It was an amazing scene!

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  41. Welcome Jay, Elizabeth and Hayley: Thanks so much!

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  42. THis post hits me on many levels.

    First off, I adore Klimt. I started writing a YA fantasy novel last year based on several of his paintings, this one included. I've long since exhausted my list of beloved Klimt favorites by posting the on my blog (several months back).

    Also, the love of my life is named Ben. That name just sticks with me.

    And the candle/flame analogy you have is brilliant!

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  43. Terresa: Glad on many levels that you liked it. :D

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