Thursday, January 6, 2011

Random haiku


silent pair of crows--
scraps of black velvet soaring
on an updraft.
*
*
*
That's it. A random haiku written in my head while walking. Now back into the land of my fairytale to see where the updrafts take me.

25 comments:

Laurel Garver said...

Just lovely, Tricia--not only for the wonderful use of sound devices (esp. the assonance), but also for seeing common crows in a moment of uncommon elegance.

Jan Morrison said...

oh I love those fly into your head while you're walking poems. Yay!

Marcia said...

I love haiku. Lovely!

Indigo said...

Love the updrafts of your writing. (Hugs)Indigo

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Laurel: Ah, I'm glad you see what I saw. I was startled when the light glinting off their feathers looked like velvet. That sparked the haiku.

Jan: This is my favorite way to write haiku, just be walking and have the words form from what I see.

Marcia: Thank you!

Indigo: Aw, that's such a wonderful comment. Thanks!

Linda Kage said...

My make haiku wonderful. Thanks for sharing.

Domey Malasarn said...

That's beautiful! More than the words, I get a very strong image in my head with your haiku.

Christina Lee said...

simple and so lovely!

Shannon O'Donnell said...

*sigh* Beautiful! :-)

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Linda: Thank you!

Domey: Oh, that's wonderful that you see the image. :)

Christina and ShannonO: Thank you so much, ladies!

Corey Schwartz said...

Ah, nothing like a random haiku to brighten a day. Keep them coming! :)

kathrynjankowski said...

Very nice!
(Guess you don't live in Arkansas, though.)
;-)

Donna said...

Black velvet ... love it.

The Golden Eagle said...

I love crows!

Beautiful haiku. :)

Liza said...

Stunning picture. Hope you are soaring by now...

Susan Kaye Quinn said...

Lovely! Thanks for sharing. :)

Jules said...

Beautiful! May the updrafts take you far above the ravens. :)
Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Corey: Oh, I love it when you like my haiku!

Kathryn: No! I don't. Those poor blackbirds. I'm in California, and I think you are too. Do you remember the crow die-off some years ago from West Nile virus? All of them disappeared from my town, but they've come back.

Donna: They really looked like that. sigh

GoldenEagle: I'm guessing you like lots of birds. :D Me, too.

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Liza: Well, at least I'm trying my wings. ;)

Susan: So glad you like!

Jules: Oh, I'd love to fly up and up. Sometimes I watch hawks dipping, diving, soaring and long to have that power.

L'Aussie said...

This is so ethereal Tricia..:)

Carolina Valdez Miller said...

That was lovely, Tricia! I don't think I've ever written a haiku, but you manage to do it so effortlessly. And a beautiful photograph to accompany it. All your posts make me wish I lived near you. You seem like such a peaceful person.

VR Barkowski said...

Scraps of black velvet - such stunning imagery. I'm moved to seek an updraft of my own.

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

L'Aussie: Ethereal! What a lovely word for it. Thank you so much.

Carolina: I have to work at being peaceful, but I find peace in nature. It's always there someplace. I wish you were here to walk with me. :)
As for the haiku, I received some great advice years ago from a woman who started one of the first haiku magazines in the West. My love of nature combined with her tips probably helped it become a form I slip into naturally.

Viva: *grins* That makes me happy. Maybe we'll meet each other out there soaring.

TerryLynnJohnson said...

lovely word choice once again!

Mary Anne Gruen said...

I hope the updrafts take you to beautiful new worlds in the New Year!