She could see the curve of earth where water met sky and smell sweet brine in the freshening breeze. She fell in behind a formation of pelicans, dropping into an elegant lineup skirting the lip of a rearing wave.
One dipped a wing tip into the mirror surface of cresting water. Nannog did the same with her broom. But the ocean knew not the witch. It swallowed her whole then spit out her long, orange braid upon the shore.
Drabble: Flash fiction in precisely 100 words.
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24 comments:
Absolutely gorgeous imagery. I so love your writing, Tricia.
That was just beautiful. Love the images and the pic to go with it.
So lovely... I can smell the salty air and feel the breeze right along with Nannog.
Wen, Anne, Julie: :D:D:D You guys just made my morning shine. Thank you!
Oh! I love it!! Which came first, the story or the picture??
And...I love your word choices: swooped, sweep, sharp, swallowed and spit. There is elegance in such words to match Nannog's flight across the cresting water. Brilliant.
What a fun piece, and so very full of sound patterns. And I love the idea of nature attacking something supernatural. :-D
Yvonne: Thank you! The picture came first. I shot it some time back and was looking in my photo archives for something to post about. I decided to write a flash fic to go with it. So glad you like it.
Laurel: You've made me grin. I love that you picked up the natural/supernatural element.
Love the imagery and the pic!! :)
Gorgeous writing, and what a lovely photo! Love them both!
Hi Jemi! Hi Stephanie! Thank you both so much for the great comments. :)
It's good to see you in a creative mode again!
What a lovely bit of drabble! Started my day off very nicely. Thanks.
Wow! Flash fiction, illustrated.
Well done! Now I can't see the image in the photo (seaweed?) as anything but the witch's hair.
Sarah, Lee & Donna: *dances* thank you!
Cynthia: !!! I love that you can see the witch in it, too. :D
I miss you and your writing so much! This is awesome!
Annie, Annie, Annie, thank you and how I miss you, too!
Oh, the poor girl.
Awesome writing, Tricia. :D
Stina: Yeah, poor thing was having such a good time, too...
Thank you!
Wow! Great job with this drabble--beautiful imagery and an ending I didn't see coming. Great pairing with your picture!
I've never heard of drabble, but you do it well! Love the photo, too.
I can't wait to see your words published into books - lots of them! Beautiful!
Angela: Oooo, thank you. this might be a lesson for me, since I saw the ending almost the moment I saw the strand of sea-stuff. Maybe it's easier to write to the point, knowing the end.
Sherrie: The brevity is challenging and freeing, actually. I might write more drabble, along with more haiku again. :D
Faith: Wow. You really made my day. I've been having some rough patches of doubt lately. Thank you.
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