Monday, November 26, 2012

A bit of drabble

On her hazel-wood broom, Nannog swooped though a pine forest following her sharp nose to the sweep of the Pacific Ocean.

She could see the curve of earth where water met sky and smell sweet brine in the freshening breeze. She fell in behind a formation of pelicans, dropping into an elegant lineup skirting the lip of a rearing wave.

One dipped a wing tip into the mirror surface of cresting water. Nannog did the same with her broom. But the ocean knew not the witch. It swallowed her whole then spit out her long, orange braid upon the shore.
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Drabble: Flash fiction in precisely 100 words.
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24 comments:

Wen Baragrey said...

Absolutely gorgeous imagery. I so love your writing, Tricia.

Anne Gallagher said...

That was just beautiful. Love the images and the pic to go with it.

Julie Dao said...

So lovely... I can smell the salty air and feel the breeze right along with Nannog.

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Wen, Anne, Julie: :D:D:D You guys just made my morning shine. Thank you!

Yvonne Osborne said...

Oh! I love it!! Which came first, the story or the picture??

Yvonne Osborne said...

And...I love your word choices: swooped, sweep, sharp, swallowed and spit. There is elegance in such words to match Nannog's flight across the cresting water. Brilliant.

Laurel Garver said...

What a fun piece, and so very full of sound patterns. And I love the idea of nature attacking something supernatural. :-D

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Yvonne: Thank you! The picture came first. I shot it some time back and was looking in my photo archives for something to post about. I decided to write a flash fic to go with it. So glad you like it.

Laurel: You've made me grin. I love that you picked up the natural/supernatural element.

Jemi Fraser said...

Love the imagery and the pic!! :)

Stephanie Thornton said...

Gorgeous writing, and what a lovely photo! Love them both!

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Hi Jemi! Hi Stephanie! Thank you both so much for the great comments. :)

Sarah Laurence said...

It's good to see you in a creative mode again!

cleemckenzie said...

What a lovely bit of drabble! Started my day off very nicely. Thanks.

Donna said...

Wow! Flash fiction, illustrated.

Cynthia Chapman Willis said...

Well done! Now I can't see the image in the photo (seaweed?) as anything but the witch's hair.

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Sarah, Lee & Donna: *dances* thank you!

Cynthia: !!! I love that you can see the witch in it, too. :D

Hobo Annie said...

I miss you and your writing so much! This is awesome!

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Annie, Annie, Annie, thank you and how I miss you, too!

Stina Lindenblatt said...

Oh, the poor girl.

Awesome writing, Tricia. :D

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Stina: Yeah, poor thing was having such a good time, too...
Thank you!

Angela Ackerman said...

Wow! Great job with this drabble--beautiful imagery and an ending I didn't see coming. Great pairing with your picture!

Sherrie Petersen said...

I've never heard of drabble, but you do it well! Love the photo, too.

Faith Pray said...

I can't wait to see your words published into books - lots of them! Beautiful!

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

Angela: Oooo, thank you. this might be a lesson for me, since I saw the ending almost the moment I saw the strand of sea-stuff. Maybe it's easier to write to the point, knowing the end.

Sherrie: The brevity is challenging and freeing, actually. I might write more drabble, along with more haiku again. :D

Faith: Wow. You really made my day. I've been having some rough patches of doubt lately. Thank you.