I just entered the No-Kiss Blogfest hosted by Frankie Diane Mallis. I thought I'd pass this year, but it's too fun! From its title, you probably get the idea--some sizzling moment that doesn't result in a kiss.
Since I decided to enter moments ago, this is super-fast. I lifted a short scene from a high fantasy novel that is shelved. (painting by Renoir) Hope it tantalizes:
The two men carried Samuel, who was limp as dough, out of the room. Fiona stared at the fire awhile, then stood, stretched, and wandered around out of curiosity. A tapestry covered one wall. It was faded and thread worn, but she admired the skill of the artist who created a lush forest. In its background were snow-peaked mountains, above which circled large birds.
On a side table was a small box with exquisite enameled roses on its lid. Fiona opened it and smiled when it began to play tinkling music. She started to dance by herself, to spin in exuberance, and immediately collided into Brendan, who had returned so quietly she had not heard him come up behind her. She reached out to shut the box, mortified.
“No, leave it open. This music is made for dancing.” He bowed slightly from the waist and held a hand out to her. She was astonished but took it, like any well-bred woman.
He pulled her close, closer than she had ever danced with a man. She could feel the warmth of his body and his breath against her unbound hair. Her heart fluttered. Her cheeks flushed. In fact, heat seemed to spread throughout her.
“You smell like lavender. My favorite,” he said softly. Did his lips brush her ear? He drew her so near she thought a feather would scarce fit between them.
They glided across the gleaming oak floor, again and again. He finally whirled her to a stop next to the music box and shut its lid.
*
That's all, folks. Hope you're stepping lively in 2012!
Since I decided to enter moments ago, this is super-fast. I lifted a short scene from a high fantasy novel that is shelved. (painting by Renoir) Hope it tantalizes:
The two men carried Samuel, who was limp as dough, out of the room. Fiona stared at the fire awhile, then stood, stretched, and wandered around out of curiosity. A tapestry covered one wall. It was faded and thread worn, but she admired the skill of the artist who created a lush forest. In its background were snow-peaked mountains, above which circled large birds.
On a side table was a small box with exquisite enameled roses on its lid. Fiona opened it and smiled when it began to play tinkling music. She started to dance by herself, to spin in exuberance, and immediately collided into Brendan, who had returned so quietly she had not heard him come up behind her. She reached out to shut the box, mortified.
“No, leave it open. This music is made for dancing.” He bowed slightly from the waist and held a hand out to her. She was astonished but took it, like any well-bred woman.
He pulled her close, closer than she had ever danced with a man. She could feel the warmth of his body and his breath against her unbound hair. Her heart fluttered. Her cheeks flushed. In fact, heat seemed to spread throughout her.
“You smell like lavender. My favorite,” he said softly. Did his lips brush her ear? He drew her so near she thought a feather would scarce fit between them.
They glided across the gleaming oak floor, again and again. He finally whirled her to a stop next to the music box and shut its lid.
*
That's all, folks. Hope you're stepping lively in 2012!
35 comments:
Lovely. Dancing is so sensual - even a formal dance.
......dhole
I felt like I was in the room watching them, it was so vivid!
Doh--I really was hoping for a kiss! (well, not me...you know, Fiona)
Ohh. Dancing does me in every time. A perfect no-kiss setting.
Love this! I agree - dancing can be just as hot as a passionate kiss. Great job.
dances are always great for kisses or no kisses.
Donna: I still remember those first dances in junior high. Every nerve on fire.
Mia: Why, thank you! After I posted I was sorry I didn't flesh this out a bit. I just blew the dust off and put it up.
Bridget: yeah, she had mixed feelings. I wish I'd put a bit more up but glad you liked it.
Amalia: There is something so sensual about dancing with someone who intrigues you.
Dawn: Yes, it can!
Michelle: couldn't agree more. :)
Oh, how I love the dances leading up to an almost kiss. So nice.
Hi Tricia,nice to meet you. I would definitely take this one off the shelf. Intriguing.
I'll be back.
I'm intrigued by this one. So simple and so wonderful. I love the magic of dancing.
Lovely. I love music boxes and oh, the dancing!
Love the dancing!!! So glad you could participate!
Christine: :D
Thanks farawayeyes. Looking at your profile I see you live on an island. Sounds like paradise. :)
Portrayal: Thank you so much!
Me: You are an enigma who loves music boxes. *dances around room*
Frankie: *waves* Thanks for holding this again. I only wish I'd decided a day sooner and fleshed out this scene, but I'm so glad I joined in. Lots of good reads, and yours was soooooooo good.
Nice! I love the feather line - and I bet that kiss isn't too long in coming! :)
Oooh then what happened???? Nice! ;D
Jemi: *waves* Actually, it is, but then I'd be giving spoilers if I ever take it off the shelf. :)
Lisa: Oh, thank you. *grins*
The way he ends the moment by shutting the music box...sigh...I vote for an unshelfing. ;)
Oh, so nice! I was on the floor dancing...
ooh i really liked this. I particularly liked the feather not fitting between them line. Great turn of phrase
Julie & Liza & Sarah: Thank you all so much!
Ooh. Yes.
This put me in such a mood to read something historical with lots of tension-filled formal dances! hehe
I love the way you described the scene--and there was lots of tension between the characters!
Donna: :)
DonnaG: So happy to set a mood. ;)
Eagle: Thank you!
I love how the dancing almost turned into a kiss--wish it did.
This was beautiful, Tricia. Thanks for sharing it.
that rebel, Olivia
Hi Medeia! Brendan is pretty persuasive...;)
Olivia: *gins* Oh, thank you!
Cute :)
She must feel pretty comfortable in that house to start dancing on her own... since she's unfamiliar with the music in the music box, I know it's not her own... so whose house is it?
What do you mean "that's all"? I want to read more. : ) Nice job!
Monkey: The house is Brendan's and she doesn't know him, at all. She only relaxed to dance because it's been the first quiet in a stormy journey, but all is not as it seems. ;)
Cynthia: Oh, thank you!
LOVE it! Such a wonderfully abrupt ending.
Very sweet - I like how the music box framed the scene.
Happy New Year!
Nicely done! I think that the 'almost' moments are the best....the reader wants it, expects it...but no, no payoff, not yet!
Hope you had a great holiday, Pat!
Angela @The Bookshelf Muse
Bish & Sarah: thank you. it's the tiniest snippet, which left out the undertones (darker than it seems, actually)
Angela: Thank you, too. I had a pretty quiet holiday but quite fine as that goes. I hope yours was just right. :)
An excellent excerpt, Tricia. I hope Fiona won't be shelved for too long because I love her story!
"Stepping lively in 2012," I like that! Happy New Year!
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